Sunrise Sunset
Golden halo upon the skies
Sunrise paints the heavens
Long ago I came nigh
In search for my Eden
Vincent's sky of blue hues
Starry starry night so brilliant
Enveloped by the blues
Lovers fight, often flippant
A burst of wine stricken clouds
Purveyor of darkened hours ahead
Happiness heavily veiled in shroud
The heart and soul in shreds
Sinar Runduk Malam
Mega kuning dini hari
Sinar naik di awangan
Rasa runsing di hati sepi
Di manakah kayangan
Mega biru saujana indah
Tak seindah mega malam
Jiwa resah gulana gundah
Tiada sudah kiriman salam
Mega merah petang hari
Mendung awan lara
Patah arah hilang hati
Rundung dan sengsara
Sinar naik di awangan
Rasa runsing di hati sepi
Di manakah kayangan
Mega biru saujana indah
Tak seindah mega malam
Jiwa resah gulana gundah
Tiada sudah kiriman salam
Mega merah petang hari
Mendung awan lara
Patah arah hilang hati
Rundung dan sengsara
Le Soleil
Le soleil peintures du ciel
la lumière d'or
Je suis presque pour
la lumière d'or
Je suis presque pour
recherche de mon Eden
Really like how you wrote the poem, especially the powerful concluding lines "Happiness heavily veiled in shroud / The heart and soul in shreds" Has a nice sound quality to it and completes a great poem. thanks
ReplyDeleteSuperbly written. I wish I could say more but I think the poem speaks for itself. Be Inspired Today! Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeletewonderfully painful close...in search of eden you found pain...shiver. nice one shot....
ReplyDeleteAh... now what have you done..
ReplyDeletethe Malay pantoun has been beautifully woven to be a (heart-tearing/tear-jerking ?) poem..
Tres bien.. sokmo
Such a beautiful image and such pain contained within this poem.
ReplyDeleteNice Indeed...Perfect title for this peiece...the oppostites of love....bkm
ReplyDeleteReading the first poem made me wish I could read the others, written in languages I sadly don't comprehend. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteFabulous! so much enjoying this read..:)) nice one shot :)
ReplyDelete..enveloped by the blues…beautiful - i like to play the blues - you weaved it into your poem...
ReplyDeletesuch great emotions I feel
ReplyDeleteabout this poem
beautifully written
Dear Dustus,
ReplyDeleteWhen I went to bed after finishing it I felt it was not what I hoped it would be...I woke up to read your comment. Your words have helped me decide to continue giving one shots...
Dear Sender,
Thank you, Sender for the ultimate compliment.
Dear Brian
Yes, you see what I myself did not see. But it's true! And that's quite earth shattering.
Dear Ayoh Wang
For that "Tres bien.. sokmo" I shall dub you my No 1 fan. And maybe I will attempt to write Sunrise Sunset in Trengganu Speak - Horror of horrors(because I have very limited TS)!
Dear TALON
Your name inspires me to be cruel and bad sometimes...Glad you liked it.
Dearest bkm,
I love it that you saw that the title was a metaphor for opposites. For the other two though, the titles were Sunset (Malay) and The Sun(French)
Dear Eric,
Honestly, the best one is in Malay(No 2). I am glad you found them interesting enough to wonder about them. My French is extremely limited...so it will be a challenge to continue to give a French interpretation.
Dear Desert Rose
I loved your blog and am delighted you found your way here...Thank you for reading - and sharing your thoughts!
Dear Claudia,
Why, thanks Claudia. The blues is better to accompany heartbreak, I think.
Dearest Suz
Yours blew me way. And still does...
Your poem took me around and around. You wrote it in three languages? Thanks for the peek -- I liked its sound in French.
ReplyDeleteLe soleil peintures du ciel
la lumière d'or
Je suis presque pour
recherche de mon Eden
I was carried back to the Musee d'Orsay for the second stanza seeing the Van Gogh there so real and vivid and almost missed the meaning of your poem.
I read it several times. The ending has an ambiguity--almost but not quite-- is what I came away thinking. How remarkable to see through the violence to a surreal beauty. Excellent.
Contrasting moods very beautifully portrayed with the sunrise-sunset image... very lovely indeed!
ReplyDeleteOui.. Le soleil peut peindre quelques beaux peintures...
Tres bien, Ninotaziz!!!
Again, beautifully done. - Bill
ReplyDeleteBeing a moon I spend much time studying the sun
ReplyDeleteA powerful, gold orb as you mentioned
Thanks for the painting of the sun with words
thanks for sharing with One Shot
Moon smiles
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ReplyDeleteDear Beachanny,
ReplyDeleteI almost died and went to heaven when you said you liked its sound [the poem] in French. I am using the One Shot Wednesday as an experiment to write French Poetry and Le soleil is my first ever. It will take a special place in my heart.
Yes, Isn't it amazing that Van Gogh's skies are always an amazing blue on blue even in the darkest of nights? And so turbulent they are...never a calm sky for the tortured genius.
Your words really lifted me up and away. Thank you Beachanny.
Dear Kavita,
ReplyDeleteDo you know I found out about One Shot from your blog? Thanks Kavita! And thanks for the lovely feedback. Merci beaucoup!
Thank you Bill - Yours was pretty awesome too.
Dear moondustwriter,
What would we do without celestial beings? Thank you for One Shots!
Lovely poem. And I really like the multi-lingual presentation. Why do things always sound better in French?
ReplyDeletehi ninotaziz..i am late doing the rounds but so glad i stopped by..not only was this an amazing poem but you also wrote a stanza in french..you are a very talented poet..well done and thanks for sharing with one shot..cheers pete
ReplyDeleteI don't know Patti...it just does! Thanks for dropping by!
ReplyDeleteThank you Pete. I will try to do One Shots in this format every week...
Lovely words Nino and thanks for stopping by!
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