On The Run


"Now where do I hide the cash?"
Coolville - population 534? Too noticeable.
Belpre of 6660?
Belle Prairie - there's a nice ring to it.

The original version, everyone, was way too creepy for me.

"Now where do I dump the body?"
Coolville - population 534? Too noticeable.
Belpre of 6660?
Belle Prairie - nice dumping place.


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17 comments:

  1. Got to be careful where you hide the cash! What a fun take on the pic of the day! Terrific! Hope you have a great week!

    Sylvia

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  2. Thanks Sylvia. The original was too creepy for me, so I changed it.

    Loved your mini-King.

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  3. I actually liked the first one
    go for the edge!
    there is something creepy about that sign

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  4. Suz,
    I can't believe I am afraid of my own writing.

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  5. They are both good but I like the second one. It is very creepy.

    Have a great week.

    My MM is here.

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  6. I'm another gruesome soul, who says go for creepy! (I wouldn't mind finding some stashed cash either, though!) Well done, on both accounts.

    Have a great week!

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  7. I'd have gone with creepy. Though I like the idea of dumping it in Coolville. Good tale.

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  8. I liked both of them, but especially the second. I'm a creepy kind of girl!

    Have a wonderful week x

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  9. Wow! Four letters changes it from robbery to homicide. Very clever. I like both.

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  10. I liked the original better - and who the heck buries cash anyway?

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  11. That's the beauty of West Virginia. Just pick a town, stash a body or two, jump back on the interstate and just keep moving...yeah, right. :-) Well done.

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  12. They were both creative! Sure, the 1st one didn't make me wonder if anyone's making you angry. ;P

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  13. Oh no! No way, Hope...this was pure fiction. Words that come out of the Jabberwockies of my mind!

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  14. Maybe you need to hide cash AND a body (of the person you took the cash from)! Good one this week. Cheers.

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  15. Yes, I'd much rather hide the cash and forget the body, than hide dead body full of cash LOL -- but what a wonderful glimpse of a larger story in this one, I love it!

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  16. I like the second one - but that's because we both had murder on our minds this week! LOL

    Thanks for coming back and leaving me the link to your 55.

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