Are you the ocean, ever evolving, all the more the same? Whose tides of change depend on the moon? What mysteries deep within, colder as you get to the core. Are you the one that ensnares ships passing in the night?
velvety surface
changing tides, unknown depths
as seasons change
ancient
Like a siren that calls, the winds, your locks of midnight raven reach out. When the winds die, they wrap around your figurative body - sensual and sinewy. Enveloping like the indigo sky above. The tip of a bursting horizon. Ecstasy.
lost within the waves
the wind calls and I return
to your lair of love
This is me drowning in you. Floating on cloud nine above the Indian ocean. Where the succulent smells of mango and dreams of the pomergranate permeate my awareness. Shared tea overflows, and seeps through.
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My haiku Ocean for Leo at Haiku Heights
Morphed into a haibun The Sensual Ocean, for Grace at dversepoets oln
Edited to elevate for a tighter read for Kim at Poets United
Morphed into a haibun The Sensual Ocean, for Grace at dversepoets oln
Edited to elevate for a tighter read for Kim at Poets United
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Ninot Ma'am,
ReplyDeleteEverything that one sees in an ocean! Great haiku!
Hank
ah at seasons change, the depths are def there to be plumbed....smiles..rather like the oceans...
ReplyDeleteI fear its depth, yet love its horizon.
DeleteDoes the horizon belong to the skies or the sea?
there is an interesting duality in that...much like love...it can leave us bouyant one moment and drown us the next...smiles.
Deleteit is the duality of the waves...like love...it can make us bouyant one moment and drown us the next...smiles.
DeleteLoved the duality point of view Brian. When I started out with this poem, I did not see the co-relation between the ocean and love. Grace's write-up somehow brought that out in me.
DeleteAn interesting experiment - honing this poem.
Haiku perfection .....
ReplyDeleteThank you Helen. Humbled I am.
DeleteOceans are my favorite thing. Loved this.
ReplyDeleteOh, don't we know that!
Deletevelvety surface. I liked the words. nice haiku.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kalpana.
Deletetrue..good usage of words..
ReplyDeleteloved reading
Glad you did Sumit...
DeleteBrought to my mind the calm sea above and the dangerous unseen depths with changing currents!! Lovely!!
ReplyDeleteDear Nanka,
DeleteI tried to comment on your page but could not. I hope ypou received my message which was :
'The picture and poetry take me back in time. William Shakespeare writing The Twelfth Night…for I imagine ships today must be like everything modern - sleek, silent, soulless.'
Gorgeous =)
ReplyDeleteMy dear MLM,
ReplyDeleteThank you for that.
An elegant haiku mirroring the classic one.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful haiku dear ~ I love the velvety surface of the changing tides and call of the wind ~ Do we listen to it as seasons passed or are we renewed with its caress, like a new lover ~ I am happy that my other person, Heaven - is part of your inspiration ~ Thank you ~
ReplyDeleteBeautiful haibun. How I yearn for the 'caress of the ocean.'
ReplyDeleteBeautiful haibun, I love it!
ReplyDeletewithin the mist
she appears as a myth
with a story to tell
Beautiful verses, both. Sorry to have missed your site lately. Hope you are well.
ReplyDeleteHaiku are my favourite form of poetry, so you know I'm going to love this, ninot. I like how you've morphed the two forms into one piece. Lovely. :-)
ReplyDeleteLove your haiku and how your weaved it into that beautiful haibun making it complete...
ReplyDeleteI just wrote my first haibun - I like the way this piece fits together with masterful words
ReplyDeleteThe ocean is always a favorite of mine
I am less affected by the moon, more perhaps it is the sea. The sea draws me back I think as I was there in the beginning. Maybe it is a yearning to be drawn back to the womb? Would you know?
ReplyDeleteWhat does all this have to do with your poem? Well I would not have had such thoughts had I not read your poem. And re-read it . . . and again.
So it has an impact. You must have so intended.
Cheers!
I love the sea, and your haibun on the ocean here wins the Internet for me today. I loved all the imagery of equating someone with the power of the ocean. It made me read your work thrice. I am now a fan and will visit regularly. :O)
ReplyDeleteI love the sensuality.
ReplyDelete...Ninot, these are sheer perfection of Haibun... i am still learning the form to write one but would love to write many sometime... loved this... smiles...
ReplyDeletevery beautiful!
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