skin upon skinthe rain cloaks
our oblivion
heightened senses
the rain mirrors
our abandon
exquisite relief
the rain welcomes
our release
gentle return
the rain envelopes
our breath
inner vision
the rain, a velvet sky
and i see stars
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Just lovely......"and I see stars."
ReplyDeletevery romantic kissing in the rain
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...so cleansing!
ReplyDeletevery pretty, it reminds me of drinking champagne!
ReplyDeleteI'm craving rain against my skin.
ReplyDeletePassion, outward nature become one. Great piece.
ReplyDeleteYou have made me long for rain Ninotaziz!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful! :-)
..those lovely lines flow as free and fast as the rain at dawn... very beautiful.
ReplyDeleteGood day.
>Kelvin
Very effective, the way you change the expected "our something" in your last line. That's good technique.
ReplyDeleteClever selection for each verse... but I guess you meant 'our breath' not 'our breathe'?
ReplyDeleteBeautiful indeed!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Love the last verse! Thanks-
ReplyDeletedynamic and elegant words.
ReplyDeletejust beautiful all of it..."the rain mirrors our abandon"...my favorite line....very lovely and delicate...bkm
ReplyDeletesimply adorable
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