In The Rain

skin upon skin
the rain cloaks
our oblivion

heightened senses
the rain mirrors
our abandon

exquisite relief
the rain welcomes
our release

gentle return
the rain envelopes
our breath

inner vision
the rain, a velvet sky
and i see stars

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16 comments:

  1. Just lovely......"and I see stars."

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  2. very romantic kissing in the rain

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  3. very pretty, it reminds me of drinking champagne!

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  4. I'm craving rain against my skin.

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  5. Passion, outward nature become one. Great piece.

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  6. You have made me long for rain Ninotaziz!
    This is beautiful! :-)

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  7. ..those lovely lines flow as free and fast as the rain at dawn... very beautiful.

    Good day.

    >Kelvin

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  8. Very effective, the way you change the expected "our something" in your last line. That's good technique.

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  9. Clever selection for each verse... but I guess you meant 'our breath' not 'our breathe'?

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  10. Love the last verse! Thanks-

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  11. just beautiful all of it..."the rain mirrors our abandon"...my favorite line....very lovely and delicate...bkm

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