smiles...the tears washing away the rain is interesting as you would think it the other way around...also the one word line with insidious at the end..sets this on its head...
Just finished reading your interview. Loved your journey.
Short verses are very difficult and when you ask us to put more into the shortest of frames, oh my! you made me think about my poetry, which makes it difficult.
I always edit and rewrite my work, and short pieces are always the most difficult. Thank you.
I always feel it difficult to embed strong emotion in just a few lines of words, and this is a very nice haiku with strong emotion built in it. I especially love the two words that opens and closes the haiku. Insidious is a perfect word that reflects the aftereffect of the situation as subtle and harmful while drenched tells me how bad she was soaked in her painful experience. Very well written, Ninot!
smiles...the tears washing away the rain is interesting as you would think it the other way around...also the one word line with insidious at the end..sets this on its head...
ReplyDeleteI was hoping that one word, and one word only would come out of this poem. That is why insidious is left hanging.
DeleteSo you are right, Brian, insidious will bring you to that word.
Excellent brevity putting a frame on a temptingly borderless image.
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DeleteI love brevity, but they are harder to work on. So, it was a good prompt!
Deletehmmm, I am only left curious: why the title, what is insidious? Perhaps this is allusions to another conversation.
ReplyDeleteAhhh so close, Sabio. What is insidiuos?
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Dark and painful--much happened to her during the rain, I feel. Excellent!
ReplyDeleteExactly CHK! What happened during the rain is now a memory...but it prevails. Thank you.
Deleteoh my- very powerful in just a few words....
ReplyDeleteDear Kathe,
DeleteI hope spring is heading your way. Thank you for dropping by...
tears washing away rain - really unique, & wonderful as a metaphor (it works!)
ReplyDeleteThanks Ruth! Lovely to know that...
DeleteThis is so beautiful!
ReplyDeleteMy prayers and warm wishes, positive vibes are with you today, Sherry.
DeleteI feel the tragedy.
ReplyDeleteDear Theresa,
DeleteTragedies often give us our most beautiful moments. It is strange.
very nice. Love the insidious ending here, nicely done. Thanks for sharing with us.
ReplyDeleteDear Fred,
DeleteJust finished reading your interview. Loved your journey.
Short verses are very difficult and when you ask us to put more into the shortest of frames, oh my! you made me think about my poetry, which makes it difficult.
I always edit and rewrite my work, and short pieces are always the most difficult. Thank you.
I was actually stumped, thank God for Tess's beautiful prompt.
DeleteTears can be more powerful than rain...excellent...
ReplyDeleteGreat prompt Tess! Thank you.
DeleteDrenched..you could feel the rain in the words..nice..
ReplyDeleteThank you Truedessa for dropping by.
DeleteThere is an art in showing and not telling you have succeeded - I am still learning. Wonderful take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThe love of writing will show us the way...Thank you R T. (I could not find you)
DeleteA brief, but perfect, response to the prompt.
ReplyDeleteHi Little Nell!
Deletereally like where you went with this....thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteOh Wayne! I haven't seen you for a while. Thank you, I am glad you liked it.
Deleteprofound!
ReplyDeleteI always feel it difficult to embed strong emotion in just a few lines of words, and this is a very nice haiku with strong emotion built in it. I especially love the two words that opens and closes the haiku. Insidious is a perfect word that reflects the aftereffect of the situation as subtle and harmful while drenched tells me how bad she was soaked in her painful experience. Very well written, Ninot!
ReplyDeleteLike a great flood !
ReplyDeleteI love the raw, wet emotion here. Well done!
ReplyDeleteYes tears can do that can't they?...This is beautiful Ninot...as always! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis one caught me in particular Nino - captures the sentiment you intended perfectly... I will be back for more... Regards Scott www.scotthastie.com
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