I just sit upon a writing desk, and write. And then, I tell stories. Legends of long ago.
smiles...the tears washing away the rain is interesting as you would think it the other way around...also the one word line with insidious at the end..sets this on its head...
I was hoping that one word, and one word only would come out of this poem. That is why insidious is left hanging.So you are right, Brian, insidious will bring you to that word.
Excellent brevity putting a frame on a temptingly borderless image.
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I love brevity, but they are harder to work on. So, it was a good prompt!
hmmm, I am only left curious: why the title, what is insidious? Perhaps this is allusions to another conversation.
Ahhh so close, Sabio. What is insidiuos?Thank you for dropping by!
Dark and painful--much happened to her during the rain, I feel. Excellent!
Exactly CHK! What happened during the rain is now a memory...but it prevails. Thank you.
oh my- very powerful in just a few words....
Dear Kathe, I hope spring is heading your way. Thank you for dropping by...
tears washing away rain - really unique, & wonderful as a metaphor (it works!)
Thanks Ruth! Lovely to know that...
This is so beautiful!
My prayers and warm wishes, positive vibes are with you today, Sherry.
I feel the tragedy.
Dear Theresa,Tragedies often give us our most beautiful moments. It is strange.
very nice. Love the insidious ending here, nicely done. Thanks for sharing with us.
Dear Fred,Just finished reading your interview. Loved your journey.Short verses are very difficult and when you ask us to put more into the shortest of frames, oh my! you made me think about my poetry, which makes it difficult.I always edit and rewrite my work, and short pieces are always the most difficult. Thank you.
I was actually stumped, thank God for Tess's beautiful prompt.
Tears can be more powerful than rain...excellent...
Great prompt Tess! Thank you.
Drenched..you could feel the rain in the words..nice..
Thank you Truedessa for dropping by.
There is an art in showing and not telling you have succeeded - I am still learning. Wonderful take on the prompt.
The love of writing will show us the way...Thank you R T. (I could not find you)
A brief, but perfect, response to the prompt.
Hi Little Nell!
really like where you went with this....thanks for sharing
Oh Wayne! I haven't seen you for a while. Thank you, I am glad you liked it.
I always feel it difficult to embed strong emotion in just a few lines of words, and this is a very nice haiku with strong emotion built in it. I especially love the two words that opens and closes the haiku. Insidious is a perfect word that reflects the aftereffect of the situation as subtle and harmful while drenched tells me how bad she was soaked in her painful experience. Very well written, Ninot!
Like a great flood !
I love the raw, wet emotion here. Well done!
Yes tears can do that can't they?...This is beautiful Ninot...as always! :-)
This one caught me in particular Nino - captures the sentiment you intended perfectly... I will be back for more... Regards Scott www.scotthastie.com
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