The Heart Remains

All her days
Her heart led her deeds
Now - all of her

Remains.

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This is an experiment for the Magpie Tales.

40 comments:

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    1. Thanks Kat, as I said it is an experiment.

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  2. i like how you lead me to the final line. something is missing, but it's the one i should find out myself :)

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    1. Dear Arian, exactly what I wanted to try out. This was inspired by the many varied poetry to Magpie 102.

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  3. I like this quite a bit! Soulful. and no Jello does NOT kill ~:-)

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    1. Thanks, Kathe. No it doesn't, does it? Jello makes everyone smile.

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    1. Thank you Taylor. I am so glad you see it that way.

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  5. Interesting...I had to read it though more than once...

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    1. Dear Tess, this poem was inspired by your earlier prompt. Everyone had a different take, with many different results. So I aimed to write a poem where everyone has to create his or her own storyline. Which starts with a woman with a heart.

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  6. nice...only way to live is by the heart...

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    1. Thank you Anthony. It was a powerful picture wasn't it, thanks to Tess.

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  8. A successful experiment, I'd say - thought-provoking.

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  9. I love how you left remains on its own line
    to be read ....
    very good

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    1. Thanks Suz, It was intended to spin off some thought. I hope it did its job.

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  10. I like it.
    Every word does its job.

    =)

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  11. And words are our loveliest tools, eh Sue?

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  12. I so love this - love that having led with her heart all of her life, that all of her remains after death. Beautiful.

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  13. Thank you Sherry. If you loved it, my experiment must have worked after all.

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  14. The final line works like a re-start! Very nice!

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    1. Yes it does, doesn't it? Thank you Tumblewords.

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  15. Oh, this can be read a couple ways, that quite a feat for so few words.

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    1. I very seldom work with purpose, when I write poetry, Mary. It usually flows. So this was the result, as I said earlier, such an experiment.

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  16. I really love this Ninot!! I read it several times outloud....thought provoking indeed!

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    1. Thank you Carrie. After reading your comment, I read the poem aloud, and found I liked the experience.

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  17. Helen, I am really glad you think so, for once again, you show me it was good to experiment.

    It looks unfinished, and yet it was supposed to leave a question, a little something, hanging in the air.

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  18. I must admit I can understand what you have said so briefly. Of coarse, we may see the underline philosophy differently, if it is philosophy.

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    1. Dear Pakcik,
      I am so happy I am still able to lure you to my poetry blog. It is here I try to hone my real craft.

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    1. Thank you Jingle! Keeping it simple is the best, though not quite easy. As I am doing here, we tend to say too much at times!

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  20. Hello,
    How are you?
    Do you like challenges?
    Share your talent with us by writing for our theme today, or share a random piece of poetry.

    Hope to see you soon!
    Best wishes.
    Cheers.
    Happy Creative Writing,
    xoxox

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    1. If time permits, I'll try. As it is I just returned from a long break from poetry due to other writing commitments.

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  21. Yes Doctor FTSE. It seems so. You can say it was just what the good doctor ordered.

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  22. This is a clever brilliant write!

    Anna :o]

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  23. Dear Anna,
    And that was most appreciated.

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