I landed into a forest filled with luscious green peaceful giants and scurrying living creatures. Stepping out, the moss covered ground tickled my lower limbs, sending life signals that spread throughout me in delightful shivers. I looked up to see the wide span of blue dotted with nebulous waterforms - the open skies I cruised through upon entry.
Then, I heard alien voices filled with hatred and machines roaring in the distance.
In that instant, I understood my mission and why my superiors called this beautiful orb flawed.
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My first attempt at Five Sentence Fiction.
A well written snapshot of the way we must look to an outsider: please continue with 5FS, it's a wonderful way to convey a lot in a small space :)
ReplyDeleteI will certainly try to come back weekly. It was such fun!
DeleteNinot Ma'am,
ReplyDeleteFSF seems interesting! Your verse moves beautifully. Yes, there're lots of things wrong in this world! Great!
Hank
Thanks Sir Hank. As I am focusing on stories and novels, I find this exercise in prose helpful indeed.
DeleteFANTASTIC! An Avatar. Beautifully done, Ninot!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry. Yes, it is rather Avaratistic, isn't it ?
DeleteLovely. We are all flawed - that's part of the beauty of life.
ReplyDeleteWhy, that is so true. Perfection is just perfection. But beauty celebrates how little 'flaws' makes a unique picture.
DeleteHowever, I wish we could heal our flawed world.
Beautifully put!
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DeleteDear Lisa,
ReplyDeleteHad a lovely visit to your blog. Keep on writing and never never give up what you love!
I too though of Avatar. It's a very interesting beginning that makes me want to know more!
ReplyDeleteSorry Mary! That's all for this story now.
DeleteAvatar does come to mind in this Ninot....perfect for the prompt! :-)
ReplyDeleteStrangely, I did not think of Avatar at all! But I concur!
DeleteI thought this was beautifully said---my first exposure to 5-sentence fiction!
ReplyDeleteDear Audrey,
DeleteIt is my first too. I think 5SF is a wonderful idea. It does train us to become economical and yet it was crucial just to find the right word.
One key thing I think, is NOT having long winding sentences to compensate.